首先做一个过渡:I wish that the present will bring him a number of influences.
接着写第一个论点及其细节论证:First, hopefully, with the watch, he will pay more attention to punctuality, which is an important merit of a person. In the past, diligent and warm-hearted as he was, he sometimes had no sense of time, which caused him to be late for many things and led to some trouble in work. In the future, the watch will always remind him of the time so that he will be able to do everything on time.
再写第二个论点及其细节论证:What’s more, I hope this watch will bring happy memories to him in the future. He used to tell me that he might feel lonely in the future after leaving high school and entering a completely new environment. The gift will surely bring him back to the good old days we gaily spent together and make him feel better when he misses the old friends in high school.
最后的总结一般用一句话即可,可以是对全文观点的归纳,也可以顺带提出自己的一个建议或者希望。但是建议或者希望的内容一定要简洁,否则就被视为跑题。
比如2007年高考作文的结尾就可以写为: I do wish that Tom will like this present, which will bring him a profound influence and motivate him to fight for a better future.
另外如果文章讨论的是一些具有负面影响的问题,也可以在结尾时顺带提一下如何解决这个问题,比如关于代沟产生的原因的话题,最后结尾的时候可以一方面总结代沟之原因,另一方面说出你的建议。例如:It is the lack of communication between the parents and the children that have led to the generation gap, and it is advisable that the both generations should talk more with each other to bridge the gap.
在高考写作的评分标准中,语言占了10分,内容10分,结构5分。但是事实上,掌握好结构远远超过了5分的收益。一个考生如果不懂文章应该是什么样的结构,就很可能不知道应该如何构思,不知道怎么构思,文章的内容就会不符合逻辑,甚至文不对题,导致在内容上失分,而一个内容不充实的文章,也很难在语言上出彩。这样一来,结构可谓“牵一发而动全身”,关系到整篇文章的写作。所以建议同学对结构好好研究,熟记于心。但同时要注意的是,要从本质上来把握结构的逻辑,不必死板地套用结构,只要在逻辑上讲得清楚就是一篇好文章。比如在细节论证的时候,有些同学如果使用了较长的句子,只用一个细节论证也是可以的。比如下面一篇文章从表面上看跟刚才讲的2007年高考写作略有区别,但本质上其实是一个逻辑,请大家参考。
It is universally acknowledged that a good present is of great value to a person and even prone to change his or her life. As for me, one of the most meaningful presents I have given to my friends is a watch which had accompanied me for more than three years.
The watch was given to Tom, who is one of my best friends. Diligent and warm-hearted as he is, he sometimes has no sense of time, which causes him to be late for many things and leads to some trouble in work. By giving him such a watch, I hope he will pay more attention to punctuality, which will bring him more credibility in life and higher efficiency in both work and study. Besides, he used to tell me that he might feel lonely in the new environment after leaving the old friends in high school, and thus I hope that such a gift will remind him of the good old days we happily spent together and help him to feel better when he misses me.
Anyway, I do wish that Tom will like this present, which hopefully will bring him good luck and motivate him to fight for a better future.